Go ahead and finish it, it feels incomplete, I'm just left hanging. You've got a good rythem, but it needs more. A whole song more. XD
On a separate note, a good model for typography flashes would be 'Dot Dot Dot' as the creator of that video really plays with the text. I also have a penchant for words appearing whole as opposed to syllables, but that's just a style critique and usually don't mean much.